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The Beginning
Author: slave elle
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(Added on Sep 15, 2003)
(This month 50483 readers) (Total 61088 readers) |
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Story about slave's use one evening for her Master and Master's friends. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (6/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
cymbidia
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Jan 3, 2006 |
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I liked this story because it was believable. Maybe it was hard to accept that there were ten men doing what the author wrote about--but it was believable that a group of men would use one slave in something approaching the manner described here. That story could definitely use work around imagery, which is surprisingly flat. Additionaly, the first person perspective makes it much harder for the reader to become a part of the story. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
fasloth
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Oct 17, 2003 |
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Very nice ... my kind of story! (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Emily
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Sep 24, 2003 |
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There is some heat and creativity here but the writing needs some work. (6/10)
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