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Invaders
Author: Zenar
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(Added on May 20, 2005)
(This month 9739 readers) (Total 18173 readers) |
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A warlord captures a small village to feed his army and other things. |
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Average (?):  (3.5/10) |
Average
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Highest
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Nov 19, 2010 |
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i think lexludite and chksng19 have said all there is to say about this so called story. (2/10)
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chksng19
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May 23, 2005 |
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Can't really say anything for the story. The machine makes no sense. The ending; were they released?
Grammar and spelling need checking by someone for whom English is their native tongue. If it IS yours, Zenar, there is no excuse. (2/10)
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Dododecapod
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May 22, 2005 |
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You started out with a nice, mythic, quality, but you couldn't seem to sustain the dreamy quality, which was really the only thing going for this. There was little eros, and without names or any sort of description the reader cannot identify with the protagonist(s).
Your grammar and spelling need significant work as well. (4/10)
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Mad Lews
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May 21, 2005 |
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Ok it wasn't Victor Hugo but it wansn't that bad either. More a description of a number of scenes than a plotted story.Learn to use a spell checker and that will help a lot. (5/10)
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lex ludite
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May 21, 2005 |
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I honestly don't know what to make of this story. However I do know a piece of amateurish trash when I see it and this one qualifies in spades. As a minimum I'd suggest that the author invest in a dictionary so that more than fifty percent of the words used are spelled correctly. I won't even go into the atrocities committed on the grammar. All in all a very unsatisfactory performance on all counts. Read this at your own risk! (2/10)
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