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Down, Out, and Fucked
Author: acidflux
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(Added on Apr 7, 2006)
(This month 49986 readers) (Total 61316 readers) |
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a weird meeting, a crazy commin together |
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Average (?):  (3/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
bracemaiden
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Apr 22, 2006 |
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I have to agree with heycarrieanne. Native English speakers will have access to spell-checkers, which will also tell of common grammatical mistakes. Talk to others, and your stories will improve. (2/10)
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Dododecapod
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Apr 21, 2006 |
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Learning spelling and basic grammar would at least make this readable. I have no idea about any of the rest - story, pacing, erotic content? If one cannot communicate effectively, all content is irrelevant. Try again. (1/10)
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laursie
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Apr 10, 2006 |
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where is the beginning and end? (3/10)
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La Toya
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Apr 9, 2006 |
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I agree with the other reviews (2/10)
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chksng19
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Apr 9, 2006 |
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Not really a reviewable story. Mostly without plot, not really much of anything. (2/10)
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mkemse
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Apr 8, 2006 |
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not sure what to make of the story, it seems to go nowhere (2/10)
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jip
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Apr 8, 2006 |
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Story is somewhat slow and stops when action starts.
Perhaps it is only part 1 of more to come.
Could review my score later onwards if another part is added. (5/10)
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heycarrieanne
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Apr 7, 2006 |
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I am guessing that English isn't your first language. You have typos galore and your grammar is just bad. I could not even follow your story. Perhaps you might want to find an editor to help you over in the forums. (2/10)
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