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A Date
Author: SFCityDom
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(Added on Apr 12, 2006)
(This month 10243 readers) (Total 40554 readers) |
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A Date Gone Bad? |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
PetJulie
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Oct 15, 2008 |
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That was awesome! I really enjoy the fake-out of the reader until the end. (9/10)
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J's blu
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May 16, 2006 |
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i didnt read the first draft, so, here goes: is well written, short sharp is not meant to be longer. the feel of the characters is there, the scene is set well, the atmosphere, its all there for me. i could feel the tension/lust. excellent. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Apr 20, 2006 |
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This was a nice, if short, tale. The flow was quite good and the action was well put. This is one of the few stories I have read where first person omnicient did not detract from the story. I would offer, however, that had this story had been set up in the first person omnicient and then transitioned to third person omnicient it would have been a better read.
On the negative side, the writing skills of this author need to be polish considerably. Punctuation was sub-par and there were several incorrect usages of words. That the story was able to overcome these technical failures is a testiment to the story telling skills of the author.
Finally, I disagree with certain comments that this story should have been more detailed. It was a quick punch in the groin, apparently designed to get in and get out quick. I liked that. Most especially, I thought the ending was quite appropriate and mindful of the fact that most relationships are not strict D/s or BDSM. That is, it struck me as realistic.
**This is one of those stories where I wish I had two criteria to provide numbered ratings. If this were possible I would give it a "6" for the technical deficiencies and an "9" for the story. (8/10)
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bondage_man69
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Apr 19, 2006 |
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needs to learn how to spell. (1/10)
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La Toya
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Apr 14, 2006 |
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Short but nice (7/10)
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mkemse
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Apr 14, 2006 |
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nice but to short (9/10)
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chksng19
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Apr 14, 2006 |
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A little sparse on motivations until the end. Nicely told, though. (7/10)
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chattel69
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Apr 13, 2006 |
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It was nice, I hope we get more information on their relationship (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
jip
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Apr 13, 2006 |
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Short but nice story. Ends different than you would expect! (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Foxysake
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Apr 13, 2006 |
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nicely written however, I suggest you add more small details to spice up the story (8/10)
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