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Shocking News
Author: EDMUNDO SLOTH
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(Added on Apr 12, 2006)
(This month 16295 readers) (Total 34992 readers) |
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Sara gets tricked into wearing latex and finds a trip to the Doctor extremely uncomfortable |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 22, 2009 |
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not real sure what to make of this story yet, will review my rating when you add more to it (7/10)
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- Replied by:
EDMUNDOSLOTH
(Edit) (Apr 14, 2006)
- Thanks for you comments. I apprediate your time. I have a layout for this story and am working on the next instalment. I hope that you enjoy it.
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chksng19
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Apr 14, 2006 |
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This tale is good, right up to the last section, when the power is applied. It then seems to go into hyperspeed and end, **BOOM**. Too fast; a torture is supposed to hurt, to be leisurely, and, eventually perhaps go to your ending that she likes it.
There are waaaay too many opportunities to make this a little more interesting story. I'd suggest you redo the ending section. (5/10)
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- Replied by:
EDMUNDOSLOTH
(Edit) (Apr 14, 2006)
- Thanks very much for taking the time to read my story and comment. As its my first attempt I'm sure that there are many areas where I can improve.
I agree about the ending-although I had planned this as a far longer story and will be adding to it.
My wife also says that I tend to reach the climax too quickly. You don't know her, do you?
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