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Life as this slave knows it
Author: cb
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(Added on Dec 4, 2006)
(This month 52723 readers) (Total 61116 readers) |
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Nothing is off limits in the world of a slave. This story shows the real honest use of the woman He owns. |
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Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
GarrickBailley
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Dec 4, 2006 |
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I agree with masterdw, this is pretty bad grammatically. It has potential, however way too many errors detract far too much to make it readable in my opinion. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
masterdw
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Dec 4, 2006 |
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This needs a rewrite. You are a sadist out of my heart, but your grammar and punctuation are so bad that they destroy the story. Rewite it and I will love to give you a better grade. Make it clear who is speaking. Shorter paragraphs would help. The story could be a 9 but your writing is a 2. (6/10)
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