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Rachel's Slavery
Author: Raphael
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(Added on May 8, 2007)
(This month 50828 readers) (Total 58419 readers) |
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BDSM games with Rachel and her Master, Michael |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (6/10) |
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Highest
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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May 12, 2007 |
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It does not matter if you have a good idea or good content when you put your entire story in one paragraph! If you were to organize your writing properly I think this might have been a decent story, but as is ... it is too difficult to muddle through. If you reformat, I will be happy to give it another look and give another score. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
DeGrinch
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May 9, 2007 |
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The story, discriptions etc were quit good, although I would like to have a little more background on the characters. The worst thing is that it has no paragraphs, the whole story is bunched into one lump, making it a bit hard to read in places. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Skruddgemire
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May 8, 2007 |
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Loved it, was right up my alley. This story would do well with follow-up chapters (9/10)
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