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dad fuckholy
Author: shi pain
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(Added on Apr 9, 2008)
(This month 53146 readers) (Total 64757 readers) |
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The story young womans adventures sexual slaver and reluctant |
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| Reviewer:
snuffy28
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Apr 1, 2012 |
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plot & character developement?? (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
Kadence
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Apr 22, 2008 |
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holy christ (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
SimonMagick
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Apr 17, 2008 |
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It's so bad it becomes surreal, like a Brion Gysin cut-up. Still, you're smarter than Anne Coulter. (2/10)
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alsub
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Apr 17, 2008 |
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Could not understand, most children can write better then this. Maybe the author does not know English... (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
thedominthehat
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Apr 13, 2008 |
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Poorly written and so short I am not sure why it was even posted. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
Razor7826
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Apr 10, 2008 |
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Completely incomprehensible. I'm not even sure that it counts as English. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Apr 10, 2008 |
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This poor excuse for a story seems to have been written on a keyboard of which the touches were picketing in wide circles around your PC: sometimes you were able to hit 'em, most of the time you weren't...
My guess is those keys were picketing because on strike against the way they are being abused into forming half words and unfinished sentences.
If English shouldn't be your first language, it's not an excuse. Either you master a language well enough to come-up with some decent and readable constructions, or you don't and you don't write in that language. Simple as that.
Should English be indeed your first language, go back to school, because you missed too many lessons. Harsh? Yes. But it's the truth.
JJ (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
Noelle
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Apr 10, 2008 |
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There were so many typos that you could hardly get the feel of the story (1/10)
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