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A Step into Submission
Author: Davus
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(Added on Jun 8, 2008)
(This month 41840 readers) (Total 79940 readers) |
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A favor for a friend turns into the first step towards complete submission at the feet of a cunning young domme. |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Escritor
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Feb 13, 2009 |
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I think I agree with all the previous reviewers. Exquisite story, very nicely written. As abitbent says, try to avoid the word "handiwork".
I assume the text being duplicated is just a Library mess, happens to my stories too.
And as topsfrombottom says, I'd LOVE to read more, but wouldn't like feminization either.
I'd like to add that there are a few minor misspellings and some tenses being mixed up. Just some corrections to make a great story a superb story. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
topsfrombottom
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Sep 1, 2008 |
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Outstanding. Points off ONLY for punctuation. You should work on such 'cadence-keepers' as semi-colons (';') & ellipses (' - '), since it's clearly apparent that they were indeed there, in your head, as you wrote. Nevertheless, bravo.
The story rocked, though I fear greatly you're soon to plummet into the Female-denigrating wallow of putting a male in Feminine attire - something tantamount, (in my humble opinion), to draping pearls around a pig's neck and a diamond tiara on its head. We 'manimals' oughtn't be elevated to Femininity by being permitted such Effeminate finery. Again, just my belief.
Other than those two items - one a grammatical suggestion & the other a personal plea of reason...
MORE! MORE! MORE!
tfb.. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
straponsissy
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Aug 18, 2008 |
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wonderful!...please continue.... (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
julietvuk
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Jul 15, 2008 |
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A very good story although Part 1 is a marred by much of the text being duplicated. The characters are being nicely developed and I look forward to further installments. (8/10)
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abitbent
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Jun 22, 2008 |
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Well written but leaves you at a cliff hanger at just the best part! I'd like to see more from this author.
Although the story is well written, it does contain the ever femdom story present word: handiwork (9/10)
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