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Naughty Day
Author: SM_Rugrat
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(Added on Sep 18, 2008)
(This month 53494 readers) (Total 63271 readers) |
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A day of being slave to my wonderfull Mistress. |
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Average (?):  (5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Escritor
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Oct 7, 2008 |
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Good start... but where's the rest? It's too short and it ends abruptly. Mind the tenses, you start the story in the past and in the first paragraph switch to present tense.
Rating: 5, OK, but HAS SOME PROMISE, the author could improve it. (5/10)
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