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A Drive
Author: Darkcanister
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(Added on Jun 9, 2010)
(This month 51547 readers) (Total 56308 readers) |
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I go for a drive and my car breaks down. Two men offer to help in more ways than one. |
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Average (?):  (4/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Jun 15, 2010 |
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To be honest i think i am being overly generous with this rating. There is no flow to the story it is all "I did". "He did". "They did". How about fewer sentances and a few more comma's?
Dear author if English is your second language (and i hope it is) then i strongly advise you to get an English language editor to read through your stories first. (3/10)
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