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Mister Boss Man
Author: Kristina Hansen
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(Added on Apr 26, 2011)
(This month 51217 readers) (Total 52308 readers) |
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About a rusty Dom finding his true-sub in an oblivious young woman... |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Thon
(Edit) |
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May 12, 2011 |
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At the time of review the story is very short (10kB) and ends mid sentence...
I don't really know what to say about what's actually here now.
On a positive note; I'm still curious to know where this goes, and I liked the codes and synopsis (hey that's why I'm here).
But then again, we've seen no action so far and very little of story development. So .. I guess the synopsis and codes mearly comes across as false marketing so far.
The writing was ok I guess. I found very few faults with such things as spelling and frases used.
However I did find the narrative a bit chatty and lacking of flow(?). I can't really put my finger on why, but I found the text somewhat cumbersome to read. It was like it would go stop-go-stop-go and so on.
But then again I'm not from a english speaking country so I'm no expert on these things.
If the story is added to I'm prepared to give it another chance. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
bracemaiden
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May 3, 2011 |
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The story has style, but suddenly cuts off before it really gets going. A part 2 would be a great improvement. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
PaddleMePlease
(Edit) (May 4, 2011)
- Yeah I agree ;) This is just an appetizer... I just wanted to put something in and see if it had potentiale :) It'll get updated - don't worry :)
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